Presentation for mid-year assesment

(06/2012). Powder ink and starch on canvas. (1000mm x 1400mm)


I wasn't too convinced by this work when I set it up for mid-year assessment. Now, I'm convinced that it definitely doesn't work. It could be due to the colour of the background (which when seen personally is slightly too yellow). I tried focusing on the 'breath', but it still is to compact, and cluttered to bring forth a dialogue focusing on 'breath'. 


Through the format and layout I wanted to break away from the conventional presentation of a 'painting' since I don't consider it one. However, this didn't work as I intended it to either...  Time to move out of 2D imagery and into space!